OET真是有夠貴  $580

不過已經分享過準備心得跟想法

 

2016 OET 職業英文考試經驗分享 (針對寫作)Occupational English test

今天就來寫一下我正式考完之後馬上默背寫下的稿子- 分數B 

真實度約9成,要拿B大概這樣就可以了 40分鐘請記得留個5-10分鐘檢查文法跟字數!! 

我考的這三次OET的寫作都是約兩頁多的資訊

所以要學會的是怎麼摘要跟簡潔的寫出重點

字數要算好,我這篇202字

主要是病房護理師轉介一個正接受ESI治療卻自行增加止痛藥的病人給醫生

我只有內文,也就是只算字數的部分

其他開頭跟結尾請自己一定要有模板

畫底線的就是模板+時間提示(事件描述要從舊到新,加入時間點方便考官閱讀)

 

 

 

I am writing to refer Mr. Jone, who represented on 17/02/16 due to worsening back pain and underwent an epidural steroid injection (ESI).

 

 

Mr. Jone is retired and lives alone. Although his daughter and son-in-law live nearby, they have not visited him over two months.

 

 

In terms of his medical history. Mr. Jone's right arm was broken following a fall on 04/06/15.

He complained of back pain on 09/09/15 and Traceton 300mg twice a day as well as Codeine 200mg daily

were therefore prescribed. On 17/02/16, he was diagnosed with a spinal stenosis following a result of his X-ray.

He received the first ESI dose on 28/02/16. However, he has increased difficulties in his activities of daily living

after the treatment and refused other therapies. Today, he was frustrated due to the worsening pain

and took an extra dose of  Traceton by himself.

 

 

Regarding his plan, could you please arrange home visits twice per week to ensure that Mr. Jone takes his medication as prescribed

and assist him with daily activities. It will be beneficial if you could encourage him to see a physiotherapist and an occupational therapist. 

Please note, his next ESI has been scheduled on 08/06/2016.

 

 

If you have any queries, please contact me.

 

 

Nurse

Melbourn Community Clinic 

 

 

我自己分析一下這篇,我的結構是四段

首先要看清楚收信是誰

醫生的話一定要交代藥物,治療過程等

 

1.introduction

2.social background

3.Hx and meds

4.request

 

文法部分我混用各種時代 現在式,現在完成,過去式,過去完成跟假設句

跟從頭到尾tone調保持被動語氣(比較客氣)

 

 

introduction我只用了一句話,但濃縮重點

 

第二段

He complained of back pain on 09/09/15

and Traceton 300mg twice a day as well as Codeine 200mg daily were therefore prescribed.

我習慣雅思的花俏寫法,如果要自然簡潔有力其實建議改

He complained of back pain on 09/09/15, so 

and Traceton 300mg twice a day as well as and Codeine 200mg daily were therefore prescribed.

 

He received the first ESI dose on 28/02/16.

應該改成

He received the first ESI dose on 28/02/16.

 

 

 

 

自己改自己的寫作其實會比較容易知道自己狀況

希望這樣的分享有幫助到你們

大家加油

 

 

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  • 路人
  • 謝謝你分享這麼詳細!我還在準備oet中,年底考,幸運剛好看到這篇!
  • :) 加油囉
    如果準備好又沒財務壓力建議連報
    因為OET不確定性很高

    sunycat 於 2016/08/18 16:31 回覆

  • DD
  • 不好意思
    想請問澳洲的護理紀錄書寫也是用SOAPIE嗎?
    還是其他方式?
    台灣的護理人員花在寫護理紀錄單張的時間超多的
    雖然現在推護理電子化 但是依舊是在護理站敲打鍵盤....
  • 交班是用ISOBAR/ISBAR
    紀錄也是類似這樣但是是敘事性的
    如果沒什麼大事其實一兩句話結束就好
    很快的:D 當然"複製貼上"是世界通用方式
    當電腦化成為主流:)

    sunycat 於 2016/10/09 00:15 回覆

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